Possibly the best Flash series ever made!
Sambakza, I've always been a fan of this series, and waited by you from the very beginning. Finally, after 2 long years, our thirst has been satisfied, yet our hunger still rampages. The series is complete, yet we all know that we will never keep wanting more of the lovable characters and stories that have touched us so deeply.
Now speaking from a critical angle, I'd like to point out that "There She Is!" is masterful in almost every aspect.
The storyline is compelling. Characters, symbols, and events all build suspense and satisfies at the end. Each step is wonderfully done by itself, but is even more stunning from the perspective of the entire series. Most people will not even realize the technical depth of the plot, most of which emerges starting from Step 3.
The main characters are cute, universal, and definitely memorable, and the supporting characters fit perfectly into the storyline, adding much depth to the series later on.
Of course, all of this would be nothing without quality animation, which seems to be effortlessly executed thanks to the endless efforts of the team. Flow is natural, techniques are powerful and effective, and the general quality and detail is incredible.
The sound and song choices are some of the best I've ever heard. Fx are high quality, and the background music is both emotionally powerful as well as have lyrics that are surprisingly relevant to the story, and all of this is only amplified by the animation.
Not only is each aspect well done, but the author does a masterful job of fusing them together. The series is light-hearted and cute, with a touch of humor here and there. Because it's so universal, it's sure to please everyone that is anyone, regardless of age, race, or gender.
SamBakZa, I am forever a fan. Thank you for this masterpiece.
The story and visuals were amazing, and it was pretty well done.
My only criticism is that the music could have been better. Really.
Even if you aren't that good at the programming, you could do better at some other categories, such as humor. Not bad overall, though.
Synths don't seem to fit with each other, chord progressions are extremely boring, and the melody lines sound amateur. Vocal-ish bass line screws up the chord work.
The only thing that really stood out to me was one effect, the huge pitch bend wail. And that one effect wasn't even used correctly.
Ultimately though, it sounds amateur and dry more than anything else.
Harmony needs work, too much bass.
The strings harmonies don't fit very well with the piano melody. I suggest learning/working on counterpoint more. The strings either match the piano, making the song feel empty at such a low register, and there are a few points where the harmony doesn't match, and I'm not talking about nonharmonic tones. Follow your own chord structures.
And the other issue is that there is quite a lot of bass in this song, which means you're gonna need more of even lower bass to act as a foundation. In this case, a lot of melodic stuff is found in lower registers, so you have to be careful. Some parts of the song got dangerously close to being fuzzy sounding because there wasn't enough lower bass. An alternative is to focus on more chord work in the higher registers and keep the melody low.
Also, I know that you have your own intentions for each piece, but I find the piano very disappointing in this song, because all you do is use a single melody line. Pianos are very powerful and flexible, full, and unique because of how it's played. You have the potential for lots of accompaniment, chords, runs, counterpoints, etc, so use them and take advantage of them. For most songs, the piano parts themselves could almost act as a whole piece.
Piece does improve a bit when upper strings come in near the end, since it makes the piece feel more full and gives a solid foundation.
Though I do have to say, like most amateur works, this does have a lot of emotional effort put into it. For orchestral works with a lot of emotion, I do recommend suspended cymbals. They work wonders, with or without crashes at the end of them.
I would also recommend improving the chord progression by adding more variation and spicing it up a bit. Unfortunately, there's really no good way to describe this without going into a decent amount of music theory (not hard to learn though). I would at least recommend trying new things, especially outside of the box stuff.
For extra techniques to add flair, try ornaments, modulations (key changes, these are powerful), a few melodic fills, and slightly changing certain things in the piece as they repeat (this one is hard to describe, just experiment to see if you can improve on the original melody with more tension and just stick it on the end).
Hope this helps!
This helps indeed!
Thanks for this very critical and helpful review!
You've written much things that i can use to become a better composer.
Well, that's all i have to say. Again, thanks!
Horribly generic. Everything was very constant all the way through, and everything was much too basic. Quit out halfway because I was falling asleep. Nothing clicked, sorry.
So, even though the piece had a decent arrangement and it didn't make your ears bleed because it wasn't as bad as you say it is, it deserves a 2?
I all of a sudden doubt your "musical prowess".
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